Thank you muchly for the feedback. To be honest your sentences read much more naturally than mine anyway. I think part of it simply has to do with my inexperience with german vocabulary, though another part seems to do with my tendency to imagine sentences in English and attempting to rerender them in german. Aside from more simple sentences it's next to impossible for me to think that naturally in german at this point, but I try.


I detect you want to see the rest of my paper. My answer to that is more or less No.


Yeah, thanks again. It actually means a lot to me, so I'll take note of it.